The heat from the pavement made Brad’s feet ache. He kept walking, following that tiny string bikini swaying on the curvy rear up ahead. Hypnotised by the motion of her hips, he’d walked behind the girl since the beach.
Her rubber soled shoes smacking against bare feet, the pendulum swinging dark plait, all conspired to mesmerise Brad. Without a plan of what he would say – did he dare ask her for a drink?
Suddenly she stopped, turned. Alarmed, he spun away to study the tourist hats, heart thudding. She walked on. Coming to his senses, Brad did not follow.
Flash fiction for the picture prompt – follow the link to see who else is particpating. Many thanks to Ted Strutz for tagging me
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I am honored to be the first to comment on your new blog, Polly. A fine foray into Friday Fictioneers it is too, my sense that this would be a good fit for you was correct. Wait till you meet Rochelle! (hold onto your hat)
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Thank you Ted, it was fun and a good way to channel my creativity. Thanks for being my first comment.
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It’s the hot sun that does that – she should put some clothes on.
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You’re not wrong James! Thanks for commenting.
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Oh Brad – now he just comes across as a bit creepy! Welcome to FF!
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Oh Brad indeed! As James says, probably too much sun made him a bit giddy! Thanks for commenting.
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Welcome to Friday Fictioneers, Polly.
Brad has to learn some skills… following and then pretending not to is not a way to intrigue a woman! Excellent take on the prompt.
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Thanks for the feedback, yes he needs to learn a better way,
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Stalking is a real concern for any female. You’ve done a good guess on what is going through this creep’s mind.
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Thank you – it’s funny I wasn’t even thinking of that angle but you’re right, I see it now.
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You’re welcome.
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Dear Polly,
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! I could feel Brad’s palms sweating and his heart thudding. Poor guy. I wonder what would’ve happened if he’d actually approached her. Well done. I look forward to reading more from you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle that’s great feedback that he felt ‘real’.
I have enjoyed joining in with your fiction prompt & hope to link up again soon – everyone has been very welcoming and I have read several, although my comments have not always published (I’ll need to use a different browser)
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Hi Polly, well, I’m glad he came to his senses … sounds a bit creepish to me … 😉 Welcome to FF, by the way! 🙂
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You’re not the first to say that. It wasn’t something I’d considered as I wrote it – I was conveying his shyness. Thanks I have been made to feel welcome.
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Ah, how interesting! He may well have BEEN shy but was PERCEIVED as creepy – which, I suppose, can be the case with some who might follow a woman and not intend any harm yet creep her (or observers) out in the process. 🙂
People are so interesting!
Glad you feel welcome. 🙂
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Thank you – yes you’ve summarised the scene viewed from all angles. Thanks
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I felt as if Brad wasn’t really being creepy – just a little unthinking and perhaps a little silly for letting himself become mesmerised by that young lady’s bottom! 🙂
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Mesmerised is the operative word Susan – well that was how I motivated him.Nice feedback, thanks
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Yeah, Brad was being a dork. You shouldn’t follow nearly naked girls, no matter how curvy :).
Welcome to our sometimes nutty, always talented group, Polly!
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Hi… I think you visited one of my posts ‘Craving Answers’ – All I get is %20polly-cullen.net in the comment ID – is this you?
So I went looking for you.
I went to the prompts I played at and didn’t find you at any of them.
If you like to write short flash fiction you might also like Carrot Ranch (99 words no more no less).
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Hi Jules, I did visit yes, and I’m writing fiction on my site Griffins Key. Thanks for the tip about the flash fiction prompt, I’ll take a look
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